Equality makes us stronger as a nation discrimination has no place in our military. Since early 1993, the military had a pol
need help with revising my paper. having trouble with the APA format. I have uploaded some information on the topic. my citations seem to be off, also need stronger arguments.
Michael Rickman
ENG-123
Equality makes us stronger as a nation discrimination has no place in our military. Since early 1993, the military had a ‘don't ask, don't tell’ policy which meant that gays and lesbians could not be open about their sexual preference. Disclosing their sexual orientation or same-sex relationship to other service members could result in being discharged from active duty. The military has always been strict; over the years, as times change, so do the policies for the for our servicemen and women. It has taken many years for our men and women serving in the military to get used to the idea of gay and lesbians serving in the same uniform. Fast-forward to current times, where we now have a larger category for the LGB to LGBTQ+. We now have transgenders wanting the same opportunity with joining the armed forces, which had been a political nightmare and a civil rights issue. In March of 2018, president Trump had banned transgender from joining the military; as you can imagine, this created a huge wave of issues (Manuel, 2020). This stirs up a concern on why transgender individuals should be included in the military regardless of their sexual status. This assignment provides a persuasive argument on the grounds of inclusivity, meaning that anyone who qualifies to do their assigned duties and perform their job with zero issues, should be given a chance regardless of their sexual status.
For a long period, transgender men and women have been denied the opportunity to serve in the military even though it is a privilege and fulfilling to serve the nation and protect its people. For instance, in 2018, former President Donald Trump issued an order to ban transgender individuals from joining and serving the military. This devastating order saw approximately 15,000 active troops working day and night to execute and protect the nation leave their jobs (Manuel, 2020). This was uncalled for because as the country advances, every corner of the nation and state is shifting towards equality and inclusion. There are many benefits with Transgenders in the military, for example Cate McGregor was the first highest ranking transgender military officer to serve in the Australian armed forces. This just goes to show that it doesn’t matter your sexual status and that Transgender men and women should be allowed to serve the military because, according to the American constitution, any American that meets the current medical and readiness standards should be allowed to serve the military regardless of their gender or sexual preference. There is a culture shock surrounding sexual harassment, discrimination, favoritism, and most recently, how to deal with the new guidelines with transgender joining our military. Therefore, it makes it necessary to research and discuss fully transgender people and why they should be included in the military and other industries regales of their sexual orientation.
The LGBTQ community has had to overcome many obstacles, including sexual trauma, poor mental health, and the overall stigma of the anti-LGBTQ crowd, among other issues According to a Battle Won For LGBTQ+ Rights by Douglas, members of the LGBTQ community are just as equal and qualified to serve in today’s military as anyone else.. As it is, transgender men and women do not have a place in the military because of their sexual orientation. This can be evident through president Trump’s 2018 actions when he banned them from serving in the military. It meant that transgender individuals did not have a place in the military (Douglas, 2020). Douglas uses his article to help us understand and get a glimpse of The LGBTQ community that has had to overcome many obstacles, including sexual trauma, poor mental health, and the overall stigma of the anti-LGBTQ crowd, among other issues. We currently live in a society that believes and promotes the stigma is that only “men” are fit to join the ranks of our military. However, it should be understood that if individuals can perfectly execute their duties and responsibilities with no question, then there should be no issue with who joins.
Today, new guidelines and standards have been launched in the military to allow the troops to follow. There is such a small percentage of transgender individuals serving in the military it doesn’t have a big impact on readiness. According to Ritz’s article Name, Rank And Gender: The Service Of Transgender Troops Has Become The Military’s Most Controversial Issue, transgender troop members who transition from one gender to the other faces a rough time transitioning. In the article, Ritz emphasizes the struggle that service members undergo during the transition (Ritz, 2019). One of the struggles was pronouns and how it was difficult for most to get on the same page. It was challenging to shift from referring to the member as ‘she’ to ‘he’; however, there was no significant impact on unit cohesion or operational readiness even though a percentage of the service members had a rough time getting used to this new concept. This personal story illustrates and represents the rough time that transgender service members have because of their sexual orientation. Therefore, it is evident that the new guidelines and standards can drastically affect military readiness if held onto the latter.
Including transgender individuals in military service is a plus for the American government because it ensures that the military has more people who strengthen the various military ranks. When President Trump banned transgender servicemen from serving the military because they are a burden because of the medical costs, more than 15000 servicemen lost their military jobs due to the ban (Manuel, 2020). According to President Trump, the military should focus on decisive and overwhelming victory and not the burden of tremendous medical costs and issues that transgender people have. However, Trump did not understand that transgender men and women are ready and true to the course of serving their country. If the American government would have had the 15000 service members serving, it would work tremendously better for the military, at a lower cost than recruiting and training straight servicemen for replacement. People should be given job opportunities and capacities of service based on their abilities and skills and not their sexual orientations.
Many people are interested in joining the military, while there are those currently serving the military but having a hard time adjusting. It is all about every service member keeping an open mind. As Mark et al. (2019) illustrate in their article the health and well-being of LGBTQ serving and ex-serving personnel, anyone who identifies themselves in the LGBTQ category will encounter a tougher time in the military than most (Mark et al. 2019). Most transgender service members encounter issues of mental health, sexual assault, and segregation. These types of traumas can have a long-lasting effect on someone. By using military health experts and the studies that have been conducted on the effects of LGBTQ service members, it is evident that transgender people face stigma and prejudice during their service.
Therefore, as transgender servicemen and women join the military or those with a desire to join the military plan themselves on doing the same, they should always be prepared and ready to face all the stigma, prejudice, discrimination, and all sorts of inequality prevalent in the military service. First, it would be essential for interested parties and those already serving the military to find copies of the new guidelines and standards, read them, and understand their requirements. By doing so, they will have a leeway of staying in the military based on their merits and qualifications as stipulated under the standards. Secondly, as the military keeps on changing from time to time, transgender service members need to stay updated with the changes and work towards attaining every standard put in place.
References
DOUGLAS, M. (2020). A Battle Won for Lgbtq+ Rights. Canadian Issues / Thèmes Canadiens, 37–39.
Manuel, V. (2020). Trump's Transgender Military Ban: Policy, Law, and Litigation. Tul. JL & Sexuality, 29, 75.
Mark, K. M., McNamara, K. A., Gribble, R., Rhead, R., Sharp, M.-L., Stevelink, S. A. M., Schwartz, A., Castro, C., & Fear, N. T. (2019). The health and well-being of LGBTQ serving and ex-serving personnel: a narrative review. International Review of Psychiatry, 31(1), 75–94. https://doi-org.ezproxy.snhu.edu/10.1080/09540261.2019.1575190
Ritz, J. R. (2019). NAME, RANK, and GENDER: THE SERVICE OF TRANSGENDER TROOPS HAS BECOME THE MILITARY’S MOST CONTROVERSIAL ISSUE. Smithsonian, 49(9), 94–101.
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ENG 123 Final Project Guidelines and Rubric
Overview
Put the argument into a concrete shape, into an image, some hard phrase, round and solid as a ball, which they can see and handle and carry home with them, and the cause is half won.
—Ralph Waldo Emerson
Persuasion is a constant in each of our lives. No matter where we look, what we read, what we see, or who we interact with, we are inevitably going to encounter some form of persuasion. Advertisements want us to buy things. Newspapers and television want to convince us of how we should feel about events. We are put into positions where we must defend our thoughts and beliefs to others, and the process we apply is typically some form of persuasion.
Persuasive writing is one of the most powerful forms of writing—it has the ability to influence one’s thoughts, and also the ability to change one’s mind about a particular issue. The persuasive essay is an ideal tool for supporting an opinion on an issue using researched facts and information. It also gives you the chance to recognize an opposing viewpoint and refute it, noting that those who hold the opposing viewpoint are the intended audience of the piece.
In this assignment, you will write a persuasive essay that makes an argument about a change or a current issue in your major, a major you are interested in pursuing, or your field of work.
The project has one milestone, which will be submitted earlier in the course to scaffold learning and ensure quality final submissions. This milestone will be submitted in Module Five. The final submission is due in Module Seven.
In this assignment, you will demonstrate your mastery of the following course outcomes:
Develop stylistically appropriate writing that incorporates strategies for writing to a given audience, subject, and purpose Incorporate feedback from peer review for improving the quality and effectiveness of one’s own writing Write informative introductions; coherent theses; well-developed, organized, and supported body paragraphs; and conclusions that are persuasive and
supported by effective research Utilize appropriate research for developing a well-informed position through written composition
Prompt For this essay, you will identify an issue in your current major, a major you are interested in pursuing, or your field of work. You will then establish an argument and support that argument with research and relevant evidence.
Specifically, the following critical elements must be addressed:
I. Introduction: This is where readers will have a chance to get an idea of what your essay will be about and what you will prove throughout. Do not give all of your information away here, but give readers a sample of what is to come. Do not forget to review your writing plan to make sure you are hitting all of the points that you planned out, while also stating your claim.
A. Provides an overview of the issue you have selected, briefly describing main points and your argument. B. Compose an engaging thesis that states the argument that you will prove and support throughout your essay. This statement will give direction
to your essay and should be well thought out.
II. Body: The body is your opportunity to describe and support your argument in depth. Make sure your thoughts and evidence are clear and organized in a way that is easy for readers to follow and understand.
A. Be sure that you write multiple paragraphs that are focused, clearly state their intent, and move logically from one to the other, building the thesis argument as the essay progresses.
B. Your body paragraphs should support your argument by combining thoughts and ideas with evidence from sources. There is no such thing as a right or wrong argument; the key is how it is supported and the quality of the evidence used.
C. Address and refute any opposing viewpoints to your argument. This is your chance to discredit any opposing views, thus strengthening your own.
III. Conclusion: Think of the conclusion as a review of your argument. Use this section to restate your argument and remind readers of your supporting evidence. Think of this as your last chance to persuade readers to agree with you.
A. Review your argument. This section should consist of a review of your main points employed to support your argument. Think of this as your last chance to prove your point or your closing arguments.
B. Your conclusion should articulate insights about your argument established through your essay. This should follow logically from your essay, referring to key points or quotes used to support your argument.
ENG 123 Final Project Rubric Guidelines for Submission: Your persuasive essay must be 5–7 pages in length (plus a cover page and references) and must be written in MLA or APA format. Save your work in a Microsoft Word document with double spacing, 12-point Times New Roman font, and one-inch margins. Then, check your writing for errors. Once you have proofread your document, submit it via the Final Project: Persuasive Essay link in Brightspace.
Critical Elements Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Value Introduction: Overview Provides an overview of the
issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument (100%)
Provides an overview of the issue being analyzed and briefly describes main points of argument, but there are issues regarding accuracy (55%)
Does not provide an overview of issue being analyzed (0%)
7.5
Critical Elements Exemplary Proficient Needs Improvement Not Evident Value Introduction: Thesis Meets “Proficient” criteria, and
thesis is exceptionally clear and concise (100%)
Composes a thesis that states the argument that will be supported and proven throughout the essay (85%)
Composes a thesis, but there are issues related to clarity or relevancy (55%)
Does not compose a thesis (0%) 7.5
Body: Intent Writes multiple paragraphs that are focused, clearly state their intent, and build the thesis argument (100%)
Writes multiple paragraphs, but writing does not build the thesis argument (55%)
Does not write multiple paragraphs (0%)
7.5
Body: Body Paragraphs Meets “Proficient” criteria and supports argument with a masterfully constructed combination of thoughts and evidence (100%)
Communicates argument through body paragraphs by combining thoughts and ideas with evidence (85%)
Communicates argument through body paragraphs but does not combine thoughts and ideas with evidence (55%)
Does not communicate argument through body paragraphs (0%)
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Body: Opposing Viewpoints
Meets “Proficient” criteria and demonstrates keen insight into both sides of argument (100%)
Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints in a way that strengthens the argument (85%)
Addresses and refutes opposing viewpoints but not in a way that strengthens the argument (55%)
Does not address or refute opposing viewpoints (0%)
7.5
Conclusion: Review Meets “Proficient” criteria, and response is clear and contextualized (100%)
Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points of essay (85%)
Reviews claim and summarizes key supporting points, but there are issues regarding alignment to the intent of the thesis (55%)
Does not review claim (0%) 7.5
Conclusion: Insights Meets “Proficient” criteria and offers nuanced insight into the relationship between the evidence and the claim (100%)
Articulates insights about argument established through the analysis, following argument logically and referring to key points or quotes used to support argument (85%)
Articulates insights about argument established through the essay, but does not follow argument logically or does not refer to key points or quotes used to support claim (55%)
Does not articulate insights about argument (0%)
7.5
Articulation of Response
Submission is free of errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, and organization and is presented in a professional and easy-to-read format (100%)
Submission has no major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization (85%)
Submission has major errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that negatively impact readability and articulation of main ideas (55%)
Submission has critical errors related to citations, grammar, spelling, syntax, or organization that prevent understanding of ideas (0%)
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Total 100%
- ENG 123 Final Project Guidelines and Rubric
- Overview
- Prompt
- ENG 123 Final Project Rubric
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rough draft.docx by Michael Rickman
Submission date: 02-Feb-2022 12:45PM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1753552444 File name: rough_draft.docx (19.26K) Word count: 1505 Character count: 7989
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We need APA or MLA format
Great Hook!
Add Citations
Revise Thesis
Revise APA Throughout
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rough draft.docx GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
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We need APA or MLA format
You have the start of formatting here. Move into APA or MLA as you move forward.
Great Hook!
Great hook!
Add Citations
You seem to have information here that should be cited. Make sure to cite any time you use outside information.
Revise Thesis
You have a great start of your thesis. Look back at the Week 5 Reading on thesis and my Announcement as you revise.
Revise APA Throughout In APA,] you should list the author and the date in the first sentence of information. Something like According to Smith (2019) the measles vaccine… or According to the CDC (2019) the measles vaccine… This is dependent on whether the source has an author. See our library for further focus - https://libguides.snhu.edu/apa
Great Analysis
Great analysis. this is what we need more of throughout.
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Nice Paragraph Structure
Nice Paragraph Structure.
Add Topic Sentence
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Add Topic Sentence. Never start with evidence.
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Nice Paragraph Structure
Nice Paragraph Structure.
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Nice Opposing Viewpoint
Nice Opposing Viewpoint Section!
Add Outside Evidence
Where is your outside evidence? We need outside evidence in every Body Paragraph. Remember that we are not experts.
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