Depression Among The Teenagers

You have started your essay and you have some great ideas. Now it is time to get to work. 

First of all you may not write in second person “you” nor use first person “I” unless necessary as in your interview of someone you talked to. Only then is it allowed. do not say in my paper I will…..

Your Works Cited page is all wrong. You need to go watch the videos and see examples of a Works Cited page.

You did not document your research properly. You don’t say according to the website. YOu must watch the video on parenthetical citations and look at the example I showed you in the virtual class. You must do all this to avoid plagiarism and a zero grade!!!

You overuse rhetorical questions. Your creative use of the rhetorical questions in the intro is ok but it is overused in the body when you should be answering questions.

You claim the rate of depression is escalating. that is not proven.

also you focus on causes of depression but the purpose of the assignment is to offer arguments for why something is a problem and offer solutions. 

Also, you did not include a counterargument and rebuttal.

You may think this is all overwhelming and I know it feels that way but you got some great ideas and you have started your paper but now it is time to revise and learn how to incorporate research with mla documentation. 

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