Music power

Hello , I wrote this homework but here is the feedback of the instructor: Please give your film a name and perhaps also give the main character a name. Your pitch was a bit wordy. can you help me fix what I did wrong after my correction. 

Hello, my  film named ” music power” is a heart-warming story about a young girl named Ana who discovers the power of music. I am looking for a composer who can capture the innocent and joyful spirit of the film in their music. The type of music I am looking for should be uplifting and cheerful, with a touch of whimsy. I believe that this film will be a great steppingstone for a composer looking to build their portfolio and establish their name in the industry. We are looking for a composer who can work for free on our latest project. This project is a film that we are very proud of, and we need someone who can create music that will complement the film perfectly. The type of composer we are looking for should be able to create music that is in the same style as the film. For example, the major instrument will be a piano and strings. This is a great opportunity for a composer to get their name out there and to have their music heard by a lot of people. We believe that this project has the potential to be a career steppingstone for the right composer. If you are interested in this opportunity, please contact us and we would be happy to discuss the project in further detail. Thank you for your time.