A definition essay is where you choose a word or phrase
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Definition Argument Essay Assignment
Goal Write a 1,500-1,750-word essay using five to seven academic resources in which you argue that a contested “case” involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs fits (or does not fit) within a given category. A case may include a specific news article, story, or incident illustrating a dilemma or controversy relating to the exchange of human organs. The case does not need to be a court case.
Directions
Follow these steps when composing your essay:
• Start by selecting a controversial case found in the media involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. For example, an appropriate case might include a story in the news about an organ broker, and the term to define might be “criminal.”
• Decide what category you think your case belongs in, with the understanding that others may disagree with you about the definition of your category, and/or whether your chosen case matches your category.
• In the opening of your essay, introduce the case you will examine and pose your definition question. Do not simply summarize here. Instead, introduce the issue and offer context.
• To support your argument, define the boundaries of your category (criteria) by using a commonly used definition or by developing your own extended definition. Defining your boundaries simply means naming the criteria by which you will discuss your chosen case involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. If you determine, for example, that an organ broker is a criminal, what criteria constitute this? A criminal may intentionally harm others, which could be one of your criteria.
• In the second part of your argument (the match), show how your case meets (or does not meet) your definition criteria. Perhaps by comparing or sizing up your controversial case to other cases can help you to develop your argument.
This essay is NOT simply a persuasive essay on the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. It is an argumentative essay where the writer explains what a term means and uses a specific case to explore the meaning of that term in depth.
First Draft Grading
• You will receive completion points for the first draft based upon the successful submission of a complete draft.
• Because your first draft is a completion grade, do not assume that this grade reflects or predicts the final grade. If you do not consider your instructor’s comments, you may be deducted points on your final draft.
Final Draft Grading
The essay will be graded using a rubric. Please review the rubric prior to beginning the assignment to become familiar with the assignment criteria and expectations.
Sources
• Include in-text citations and a references page in GCU Style for FIVE to SEVEN scholarly sources outside of class texts.
• These sources should be used to support any claims you make and should be present in the text of the essay.
• Use the GCU Library to help you find sources.
• Include this research in the paper in a scholarly manner.
Format
Prepare this assignment according to the guidelines found in the GCU Style Guide, located in the Student Success Center.
Turnitin
• You are required to submit this assignment to Turnitin. Refer to the directions in the Student Success Center.
• Please be sure your Turnitin score is at an acceptable level before submitting the draft to your instructor.
Submit the rough draft of this assignment to your instructor AND post this draft as an attachment in the Module 2 Peer Review Forum: Definition by Day 3 of Week 2.
First draft essay and professors notes: (THIS IS WHAT YOU PROVIDED AND I SUBMITTED) There are notes at the end so please read.
Organ Donation
Donation of human organs is an issue that has raised controversies in most parts of the world. Different human organs are often donated for various purposes, but this process has stirred diverse opinions from parties who are interested in the issues. One common reason why organ donation is considered important is for research purposes (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Some of these organs that are considered to be transplantable include kidneys, heart liver, and pancreas. The process of organ donation is considered important in some cases especially since it saves lives and the donated organs can be useful for medical research. However, organ transplantation has raised certain ethical questions with people questioning whether it is right for people to determine what happens to others’ bodies when they are dead (Porter & Johnson, 2009). One controversial case in the media about the trade, sale or donation of human organs was of NYC man who was accused of buying kidneys abroad and selling them to his clients at high profits.
Recently, a case involving Levy Izhak Rosenbaum spurred the Internet raising questions on the issue or organ donation. The matchmaker as he called himself was accused of selling organs in the black market. In particular, Rosenbaum bought organs from vulnerable individuals in Israel at a lower cost and sold them to desperate patients in the United States at unimaginable costs (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Apparently, the scheme had been operating for decades before the FBI finally raised the alarm on the countries transplant industry. In fact, the charges against Rosenbaum if found to be true, would mark the first case of organ trafficking in the United States, according to transplant experts (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Moreover, medical ethicist claimed that a cross-national activity was ongoing although it had not reached the United States or if it was present, was not known to the authorities who condemned the act.
Rosenbaum’s arrest was made ten days after a meeting in his basement with an informant recruited by the FBI. The agent posed as a client searching for a kidney for his relative who needed a transplant at a hospital in Philadelphia (Porter & Johnson, 2009). After introducing himself as the matchmaker, Rosenbaum went ahead to state that what he had for the agent would be suitable for his relative who was undergoing dialysis. In return, the agent asked Rosenbaum the number of organs he had brokered, and he responded claiming that he had sold a lot in the recent two weeks (Shroff, 2009). This conversation was recorded and the details are taken to the FBI to take further action on the case. After investigations, authorities established that organ donors were transported from Israel to the United States as part of the scheme (Porter & Johnson, 2009). They then underwent surgery in the destination nation and the required parts removed. However, the authorities were still unable to identify the hospitals where these operations were performed.
According to the CEO of the National Kidney Foundation, John Davis, allegations of organ trafficking was quite appalling especially with the strategies that were being used by the culprits to commit the offense. On the other hand, Israel Medical Association denied the allegations claiming that they had no reports of their citizens selling their organs. In fact, she added that the authorities had no involvement with such acts but did not comment any further on the case (Shroff, 2009). However, the spokeswoman for Israel Medical Association also demonstrated her shock on the matter since the country had no idea that such matters would ever rise.
This case can be classified as a criminal case. Notably, the federal law states that it is illegal for anyone to trade organs for transplant whether knowingly or unknowingly. Moreover, this practice is considered to be illegal in other parts of the world and individuals caught in the act would be subjected to punishment. Countries such as China and other European nations also consider the process to be illegal and refer to it as trafficking of human organs. Article 234(1) of the criminal law suggests that anyone involved in the illegal trade of human organs will be charged with the offense of organizing others to trade human organs, assaulting others intentionally leading to harm or murder in case the organ is removed from the donor without consent, or illegal taking a corpse with the intentions of removing the organs in case they are obtained from a deceased person.
The chosen case matches the category of a criminal offense because the accused intentionally duped his clients into selling their organs for smaller gains. In fact, his actions can be considered to be unscrupulous since he takes advantage of desperate patients in the United States and sells them the organs at unreasonably higher rates to make profit. The sale of these organs is also done on the black market since the authorities are not aware of the process. Moreover, the constitution has deemed it illegal for any individual other than registered medical institutions to be involved in buying or selling of human organs. The law also prohibits organ transplant unless the donation is made by a close blood relative upon getting consent from both parties.
Illegal broking or human organs is criminal activity for several reasons. For instance, the person involved is responsible for organizing other to sell their organs. In the identified case, the accused organized not only his clients but also medical institutions in order to conduct his acts. In particular, he colluded with doctors from hospitals in the United States to conduct the organ transplant process. Similarly, the donors had to be transported all the way to the U.S. for the process to be conducted successfully. Therefore, Rosenbaum was responsible for being involved in an organized sale of human organs without following the appropriate channels. He conducted all the processes involved in the sale with full knowledge of nature, purpose, and consequences of being involved in such a business. Additionally, he hired, led, directed and accommodated his clients in addition to seducing them with attractive benefits in case they agreed to enter the deal and sell their organs. Therefore, the case will be treated like a criminal since the accused was guilty of all the identified scenarios.
Another reason why this issue qualifies as a criminal case is that the accused was involved with intentional assault and/or murder. Notably, the removal of body organs from a human being is a delicate process that must be done by qualified medical experts. The process could lead to the possible death of the patient or classifies as assault since the body has to be mutilated for the organs to be retrieved (Razdan, Degenholtz, Kahn, & Driessen, 2015). Moreover, as indicated in the criminal law, anyone involved in the removal of an organ from a person without informed consent is liable for punishment. The law also prohibits any person from compelling or duping another to donate his or her organs for sale since the process could lead to bodily injury and in worse cases death (Shroff, 2009). Moreover, consent in such cases can only be justified when it is made by the individual who has full capability to authorize the process, or when the donor has been made fully aware of the possible consequence or harms that the process could lead to (“The Donation of Human Organs,” 2016). It is unclear whether informed consent was given or not in Rosenbaum case because the fact is not indicated.
A person who gets involved in the sale or purchase of organs in the U.S. is charged with committing class C felony. This law prohibits the sale or purchase of human parts even in the case where the individual charges reasonable amounts for some of his or her parts of to be removed. This law is seemingly the same across almost all states in the U.S. and other countries in the world (Zhou, 2011). For example, in California, sale of organs for financial gain is highly prohibited although this may not include the costs associated with removing storing or transporting these organs. Furthermore, Rosenbaum collaborated with institutions such as Mount Sinai Hospital in New York making them accomplices to the crime. On the other hand, the said institution claimed that it was competent in conducting its transplant processes because it even assessed what motivated the donor to participate in the act (Zhou, 2011). However, most of the donors were driven by the monetary benefits and gifts that they obtained from giving out their organs hence creating more controversies to the case.
The issue of organ donation is one that is wide and continues to cause debates throughout the world. Notwithstanding, the ethical aspect that arises with the mention of this topic is also interesting. Notably, some people have claimed that organ donation is important because it helps save lives. On the other hand, the process has been established to have dangerous health consequences if not handled appropriately (Shroff, 2009). The question of whether selling or donating organs should be legalized still raises issues though one thing that is clear is that performing the act on the black market is dangerous. In other words, retrieval of organs from the living using improper channels can cause serious damages and proves to be unethical especially since the people involved are often duped and made to enter the deal.
References
“The Donation of Human Organs,” (2016). Stanford. Retrieved from https://plato.stanford.edu/entries/organ-donation/
Porter, D. & Johnson, C. K. (2009). First case of organ trafficking in the U.S.? NBC News. Retrieved from http://www.nbcnews.com/id/32132371/ns/us_news-crime_and_courts/t/first-case-organ-trafficking-us/#.W1fPG9VKiM9
Razdan, M., Degenholtz, H. B., Kahn, J. M., & Driessen, J. (2015). Breakdown in the organ donation process and its effect on organ availability. Journal of transplantation, 2015.
Shroff, S. (2009). Legal and ethical aspects of organ donation and transplantation. Indian journal of urology: IJU: Journal of the Urological Society of India, 25(3), 348.
Zhou, Zhenjie. (2011). Human organ crime and criminal liability of doctors and hospitals. Retrieved from https://www.waseda.jp/inst/wias/assets/uploads/2016/06/Z_ZHOU_2014.pdf
PROFESSORS NOTES: Your sources are pretty well documented, but there are issues with style and missing information, as highlighted and noted. While the web sources are okay to use, you are required to have at least 5 academic sources (scholarly sources from the library — see instructions) for this paper. You have 3, so you’ll need to add a minimum of 2 more academic sources from the library for the final essay. Your in-text citations are okay for summaries and paraphrase, as noted. However, there are 3 paragraphs without citations. I suggest visiting the Purdue Owl website for help with documentation.
Unfortunately, while the paper is well written and interesting and I do appreciate your efforts, this paper delivers more of an article analysis, not a supported definition essay. A definition essay is where you choose a word or phrase and define that according to your own understanding (not a dictionary); then, you support that definition throughout the paper. You will either need to rework it for a definition essay or write a new essay draft, as noted (and I think this is very possible). You have a good resemblance argument, but you use it to illustrate the need the need for a black market broker (which might for exploitation or organ broker or illegal organ sales, but I cannot tell exactly what you’re trying to define; it does not, however, demonstrate a definition specifically or at least it is not connected to one. It’s almost as if the paper is divided between a summary of the article and your analysis of it mixed with some causal and proposal features. It’s just not focused on a specific term until after the article and then it talks about “criminal.” I just see too much. If criminal or ethics is your term, that needs to be very clear in the introduction (and defined there, too). Maybe tweak the introduction to show criminality more specifically to the Rosenbaum story. The thesis then needs attention, as do the introduction and conclusion, also noted. I’d like to see a cohesive argument (which does involve some analysis) that clearly supports a definition throughout the essay. Work on focusing the essay as a definition, documentation, paragraph structure and development, thesis development, conclusion development, clarity, organization, and consistent transitions, as noted. Please read all comments, even though the essay is of the wrong type; those notes can still help you on the rewrite. I have not marked every issues but only a sample. It is your responsibility to read the paper and look for similar issues and fix those in order to improve on the final essay. If you have questions, please let me know or feel free to call me at home to discuss your paper.
THIS ASSIGNMENT IS DUE ON SUNDAY MORNING!!! IF YOU HAVE ANY FURTHER QUESTIONS PLEASE EMAIL ME
THIS ASSIGNMENT IS WORTH 200 POINTPLEASE NOTE THAT I AM PAYING ANOTHER LARGE AMOUNT OF MONEY TO HAVE THIS PAPER RE-DONE. PLEASE HELP ME. THANK YOU
PLEASE SEE ORIGINAL ORDER OF DEFINITION ESSAY TO COMPLETE THIS FINAL DRAFT. PLEASE SEE THE NOTES PROVIDED FROM THE COURSE PROFESSOR!! VERY IMPORTANT TO READ ALL OF IT. The initial essay was written incorrectly. This must be revised and redone to the specific instructions as the original. Here is what was needed:
Definition Argument Essay Assignment
Goal Write a 1,500-1,750-word essay using five to seven academic resources in which you argue that a contested “case” involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs fits (or does not fit) within a given category. A case may include a specific news article, story, or incident illustrating a dilemma or controversy relating to the exchange of human organs. The case does not need to be a court case.
Directions
Follow these steps when composing your essay:
• Start by selecting a controversial case found in the media involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. For example, an appropriate case might include a story in the news about an organ broker, and the term to define might be “criminal.”
• Decide what category you think your case belongs in, with the understanding that others may disagree with you about the definition of your category, and/or whether your chosen case matches your category.
• In the opening of your essay, introduce the case you will examine and pose your definition question. Do not simply summarize here. Instead, introduce the issue and offer context.
• To support your argument, define the boundaries of your category (criteria) by using a commonly used definition or by developing your own extended definition. Defining your boundaries simply means naming the criteria by which you will discuss your chosen case involving the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. If you determine, for example, that an organ broker is a criminal, what criteria constitute this? A criminal may intentionally harm others, which could be one of your criteria.
• In the second part of your argument (the match), show how your case meets (or does not meet) your definition criteria. Perhaps by comparing or sizing up your controversial case to other cases can help you to develop your argument.
This essay is NOT simply a persuasive essay on the sale, trade, or donation of human organs. It is an argumentative essay where the writer explains what a term means and uses a specific case to explore the meaning of that term in depth.
First Draft Grading
• You will receive completion points for the first draft based upon the successful submission of a complete draft.
• Because your first draft is a completion grade, do not assume that this grade reflects or predicts the final grade. If you do not consider your instructor’s comments, you may be deducted points on your final draft.
Final Draft Grading
The essay will be graded using a rubric. Please review the rubric prior to beginning the assignment to become familiar with the assignment criteria and expectations.
Sources
• Include in-text citations and a references page in GCU Style for FIVE to SEVEN scholarly sources outside of class texts.
• These sources should be used to support any claims you make and should be present in the text of the essay.
• Use the GCU Library to help you find sources.
• Include this research in the paper in a scholarly manner.
Format
Prepare this assignment according to the guidelines found in the GCU Style Guide, located in the Student Success Center.
Turnitin
• You are required to submit this assignment to Turnitin. Refer to the directions in the Student Success Center.
• Please be sure your Turnitin score is at an acceptable level before submitting the draft to your instructor.
Submit the rough draft of this assignment to your instructor AND post this draft as an attachment in the Module 2 Peer Review Forum: Definition by Day 3 of Week 2.
First draft essay and professors notes: (THIS IS WHAT YOU PROVIDED AND I SUBMITTED) There are notes at the end so please read.
Organ Donation
Donation of human organs is an issue that has raised controversies in most parts of the world. Different human organs are often donated for various purposes, but this process has stirred diverse opinions from parties who are interested in the issues. One common reason why organ donation is considered important is for research purposes (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Some of these organs that are considered to be transplantable include kidneys, heart liver, and pancreas. The process of organ donation is considered important in some cases especially since it saves lives and the donated organs can be useful for medical research. However, organ transplantation has raised certain ethical questions with people questioning whether it is right for people to determine what happens to others’ bodies when they are dead (Porter & Johnson, 2009). One controversial case in the media about the trade, sale or donation of human organs was of NYC man who was accused of buying kidneys abroad and selling them to his clients at high profits.
Recently, a case involving Levy Izhak Rosenbaum spurred the Internet raising questions on the issue or organ donation. The matchmaker as he called himself was accused of selling organs in the black market. In particular, Rosenbaum bought organs from vulnerable individuals in Israel at a lower cost and sold them to desperate patients in the United States at unimaginable costs (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Apparently, the scheme had been operating for decades before the FBI finally raised the alarm on the countries transplant industry. In fact, the charges against Rosenbaum if found to be true, would mark the first case of organ trafficking in the United States, according to transplant experts (Porter & Johnson, 2009). Moreover, medical ethicist claimed that a cross-national activity was ongoing although it had not reached the United States or if it was present, was not known to the authorities who condemned the act.
Rosenbaum’s arrest was made ten days after a meeting in his basement with an informant recruited by the FBI. The agent posed as a client searching for a kidney for his relative who needed a transplant at a hospital in Philadelphia (Porter & Johnson, 2009). After introducing himself as the matchmaker, Rosenbaum went ahead to state that what he had for the agent would be suitable for his relative who was undergoing dialysis. In return, the agent asked Rosenbaum the number of organs he had brokered, and he responded claiming that he had sold a lot in the recent two weeks (Shroff, 2009). This conversation was recorded and the details are taken to the FBI to take further action on the case. After investigations, authorities established that organ donors were transported from Israel to the United States as part of the scheme (Porter & Johnson, 2009). They then underwent surgery in the destination nation and the required parts removed. However, the authorities were still unable to identify the hospitals where these operations were performed.
According to the CEO of the National Kidney Foundation, John Davis, allegations of organ trafficking was quite appalling especially with the strategies that were being used by the culprits to commit the offense. On the other hand, Israel Medical Association denied the allegations claiming that they had no reports of their citizens selling their organs. In fact, she added that the authorities had no involvement with such acts but did not comment any further on the case (Shroff, 2009). However, the spokeswoman for Israel Medical Association also demonstrated her shock on the matter since the country had no idea that such matters would ever rise.
This case can be classified as a criminal case. Notably, the federal law states that it is illegal for anyone to trade organs for transplant whether knowingly or unknowingly. Moreover, this practice is considered to be illegal in other parts of the world and individuals caught in the act would be subjected to punishment. Countries such as China and other European nations also consider the process to be illegal and refer to it as trafficking of human organs. Article 234(1) of the criminal law suggests that anyone involved in the illegal trade of human organs will be charged with the offense of organizing others to trade human organs, assaulting others intentionally leading to harm or murder in case the organ is removed from the donor without consent, or illegal taking a corpse with the intentions of removing the organs in case they are obtained from a deceased person.
The chosen case matches the category of a criminal offense because the accused intentionally duped his clients into selling their organs for smaller gains. In fact, his actions can be considered to be unscrupulous since he takes advantage of desperate patients in the United States and sells them the organs at unreasonably higher rates to make profit. The sale of these organs is also done on the black market since the authorities are not aware of the process. Moreover, the constitution has deemed it illegal for any individual other than registered medical institutions to be involved in buying or selling of human organs. The law also prohibits organ transplant unless the donation is made by a close blood relative upon getting consent from both parties.
Illegal broking or human organs is criminal activity for several reasons. For instance, the person involved is responsible for organizing other to sell their organs. In the identified case, the accused organized not only his clients but also medical institutions in order to conduct his acts. In particular, he colluded with doctors from hospitals in the United States to conduct the organ transplant process. Similarly, the donors had to be transported all the way to the U.S. for the process to be conducted successfully. Therefore, Rosenbaum was responsible for being involved in an organized sale of human organs without following the appropriate channels. He conducted all the processes involved in the sale with full knowledge of nature, purpose, and consequences of being involved in such a business. Additionally, he hired, led, directed and accommodated his clients in addition to seducing them with attractive benefits in case they agreed to enter the deal and sell their organs. Therefore, the case will be treated like a criminal since the accused was guilty of all the identified scenarios.
Another reason why this issue qualifies as a criminal case is that the accused was involved with intentional assault and/or murder. Notably, the removal of body organs from a human being is a delicate process that must be done by qualified medical experts. The process could lead to the possible death of the patient or classifies as assault since the body has to be mutilated for the organs to be retrieved (Razdan, Degenholtz, Kahn, & Driessen, 2015). Moreover, as indicated in the criminal law, anyone involved in the removal of an organ from a person without informed consent is liable for punishment. The law also prohibits any person from compelling or duping another to donate his or her organs for sale since the process could lead to bodily injury and in worse cases death (Shroff, 2009). Moreover, consent in such cases can only be justified when it is made by the individual who has full capability to authorize the process, or when the donor has been made fully aware of the possible consequence or harms that the process could lead to (“The Donation of Human Organs,” 2016). It is unclear whether informed consent was given or not in Rosenbaum case because the fact is not indicated.
A person who gets involved in the sale or purchase of organs in the U.S. is charged with committing class C felony. This law prohibits the sale or purchase of human parts even in the case where the individual charges reasonable amounts for some of his or her parts of to be removed. This law is seemingly the same across almost all states in the U.S. and other countries in the world (Zhou, 2011). For example, in California, sale of organs for financial gain is highly prohibited although this may not include the costs associated with removing storing or transporting these organs. Furthermore, Rosenbaum collaborated with institutions such as Mount Sinai Hospital in New York making them accomplices to the crime. On the other hand, the said institution claimed that it was competent in conducting its transplant processes because it even assessed what motivated the donor to participate in the act (Zhou, 2011). However, most of the donors were driven by the monetary benefits and gifts that they obtained from giving out their organs hence creating more controversies to the case.
The issue of organ donation is one that is wide and continues to cause debates throughout the world. Notwithstanding, the ethical aspect that arises with the mention of this topic is also interesting. Notably, some people have claimed that organ donation is important because it helps save lives. On the other hand, the process has been established to have dangerous health consequences if not handled appropriately (Shroff, 2009). The question of whether selling or donating organs should be legalized still raises issues though one thing that is clear is that performing the act on the black market is dangerous. In other words, retrieval of organs from the living using improper channels can cause serious damages and proves to be unethical especially since the people involved are often duped and made to enter the deal.
References
“The Donation of Human Organs,” (2016). Stanford. Retrieved from https://plato.stanford.edu/entries/organ-donation/
Porter, D. & Johnson, C. K. (2009). First case of organ trafficking in the U.S.? NBC News. Retrieved from http://www.nbcnews.com/id/32132371/ns/us_news-crime_and_courts/t/first-case-organ-trafficking-us/#.W1fPG9VKiM9
Razdan, M., Degenholtz, H. B., Kahn, J. M., & Driessen, J. (2015). Breakdown in the organ donation process and its effect on organ availability. Journal of transplantation, 2015.
Shroff, S. (2009). Legal and ethical aspects of organ donation and transplantation. Indian journal of urology: IJU: Journal of the Urological Society of India, 25(3), 348.
Zhou, Zhenjie. (2011). Human organ crime and criminal liability of doctors and hospitals. Retrieved from https://www.waseda.jp/inst/wias/assets/uploads/2016/06/Z_ZHOU_2014.pdf
PROFESSORS NOTES: Your sources are pretty well documented, but there are issues with style and missing information, as highlighted and noted. While the web sources are okay to use, you are required to have at least 5 academic sources (scholarly sources from the library — see instructions) for this paper. You have 3, so you’ll need to add a minimum of 2 more academic sources from the library for the final essay. Your in-text citations are okay for summaries and paraphrase, as noted. However, there are 3 paragraphs without citations. I suggest visiting the Purdue Owl website for help with documentation.
Unfortunately, while the paper is well written and interesting and I do appreciate your efforts, this paper delivers more of an article analysis, not a supported definition essay. A definition essay is where you choose a word or phrase and define that according to your own understanding (not a dictionary); then, you support that definition throughout the paper. You will either need to rework it for a definition essay or write a new essay draft, as noted (and I think this is very possible). You have a good resemblance argument, but you use it to illustrate the need the need for a black market broker (which might for exploitation or organ broker or illegal organ sales, but I cannot tell exactly what you’re trying to define; it does not, however, demonstrate a definition specifically or at least it is not connected to one. It’s almost as if the paper is divided between a summary of the article and your analysis of it mixed with some causal and proposal features. It’s just not focused on a specific term until after the article and then it talks about “criminal.” I just see too much. If criminal or ethics is your term, that needs to be very clear in the introduction (and defined there, too). Maybe tweak the introduction to show criminality more specifically to the Rosenbaum story. The thesis then needs attention, as do the introduction and conclusion, also noted. I’d like to see a cohesive argument (which does involve some analysis) that clearly supports a definition throughout the essay. Work on focusing the essay as a definition, documentation, paragraph structure and development, thesis development, conclusion development, clarity, organization, and consistent transitions, as noted. Please read all comments, even though the essay is of the wrong type; those notes can still help you on the rewrite. I have not marked every issues but only a sample. It is your responsibility to read the paper and look for similar issues and fix those in order to improve on the final essay. If you have questions, please let me know or feel free to call me at home to discuss your paper.
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