Explain why the following letter of application is ineffective. Rewrite

Explain why the following letter of application is ineffective. Rewrite it to make it more precise and appropriate. Please read page 280 to page 288. Letter:

Apartment 32

Jeggler Drive

Talcott, Arizona

Monday

Grandt Corporation

Production Supervisor

Capital City, Arizona

Dear Sir:

I am writing to ask you if your company will consider me for the position you announced online recently. I believe that with my education (I have an associate degree) and experience (I have worked four years as a freight  supervisor), I could fill your job.

My schoolwork was done at two junior colleges, and I took more than enough courses in business management and information  technology. In fact, here is a list of some of my courses: Supervision, Materials  Management, Work Experience in Management, E-commerce, Safety  Tactics, Introduction to Software Analysis, Art Design, Contemporary Business  Principles, and Small Business Management. In addition, I have worked as a loading dock  supervisor for the last two years, and before that I worked in the military in the Quartermaster Corps.

Please let me know if you are interested in me. I would like to have an  interview with you at the earliest possible date, since there are some other firms also interested in me, too.

Eagerly yours,

George D. Milhous