Please post feedback and suggestions for how the author can improve his/her intro based on the following

You must highlight/underline your thesis, which is your evaluation of how the film (or other product/service) persuades its audience.

 Substantively answering these peer review questions with helpful revision suggestions will net you another 25 points.  helpful critiques, which also means not only complete sentences, but also support for your claims. (For example, don’t say this is good, but say this is good because….provide evidence and analysis for your claims).

1. Please post feedback and suggestions for how the author can improve his/her intro based on the following: The intro should clearly state the authors judgment, as well as offer a brief preview of what criteria the author will use to evaluate the product, and any other necessary context/background info of the product being reviewed.
2. Please post feedback and suggestions for how the author can improve his/her topic sentences based on the following: The topic sentence is also the main claim of the paragraph (and that main claim should directly support the thesis statement, which is the main claim of the entire essay). The topic sentence should clearly state the authors opinion of how well the product fulfills a specific criterion. Topic sentences are always based primarily on opinion, and should not simply summarize information. Does the author mention criteria in the topic sentences?
3. Please post feedback and suggestions for how the author can improve his/her evidence, reasons, and support based on the following: The author must use specific references (citations if possible) from the product to support the topic sentence and argue how well the product fulfills the selected criterion using strong reasons. Does the author explicitly discuss how the film uses ethos, pathos, or logos to persuade?
4. Please post feedback and suggestions about how well the author considers/addresses audience and other elements of the rhetorical situation in the evaluation.  Are the tone and voice appropriate for an academic audience?
5. Does the author use MLA format? Is an outside source included to help the author prove his/her thesis? Are citations to MLA format? 
6. Finally, post any feedback and suggestions for any noticeable grammatical problems.